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He told me to a write a "lymerick."
His spelling of which, it made me sick.
And yet here I go,
Attempting to show
That, once in a while, my wit is quick.

Ren

Ren

Hahaha you are so witty, it kills me!

seven

seven

I love limericks. I wrote one for an assignment in kindergarten once that went,

"There was a banana named Elf
Who thought he would eat up himself
He pulled back the peel
And slipped on a wheel
And ended up high on a shelf."

Boston Boy?

Boston Boy?

I stumbled across this rhyme
And quickly made up my mind
To inform that the count
of stresses allowed
Is three strong beats per line.

Far be it from me to deplore,
But in yours the count's nearly four.
And the pyrrhics don't jive
With lines one, two, and five.
I hope I don't seem like a boar.

I'm not quite sure I'm the one
of whom your poem makes fun,
But if that is the case,
I'll put on a brave face,
And tell you that mine's nearly done.

A word to the wise, my friend.
To the form of the poem, attend:
The clock struck one,
The mouse ran down,
And my limerick's now at an end.

Thursday's Child

Thursday's Child

Boston Boy?: It seems to me that if you're going to poke fun at the poor form of someone else's limerick, you probably ought to make sure your own follows the form: 9-9-5-5-9; a-a-b-b-a.

A number of yours don't follow the scheme. Seems to me that correct syllable counts would be the first thing to get straight, then maybe work on getting the right number of stressed/unstressed syllables. But, then, who needs to be able to count, eh?

Gilligan

Gilligan

My my... someone is not having a good week... Stick to your word sir, lest you open your mouth far enough for your foot to reach your... Well let's just say harsh words hurt.

Matthew 5:37

Boston Boy?

Boston Boy?

I was afraid it might have come across a little abrasive, and based on these reactions, it has. I apologize. I meant to include within my lines a disclaimer or two to avoid such a misunderstanding. ("I hope I don't seem like a boar...") I thought Rachelskirts' limerick was quite nice and fun. Silly -- exactly what a limerick should be. No one should take a limerick too seriously, and I didn't mean to seem that I was. It was a sorry attempt at irony.

For example: because of the entertainment and comic focus of a limerick, syllable count is quite fluid. All that matters is stress count (trimeter on 1-2-5 and dimeter on 3-4) and rhyme scheme, both of which I believe I followed (with one exception, also an attempt at irony: 1st stanza line 5 "Is three strong beats per line" has four strong beats, arguably five). Syllable count is more fluid though. 9-9-5-5-9 may be typical, but take Hickory Dickory Dock, for example. No one would deny it's a limerick. It follows the aabba and has the stress count. But syllable count is 7-6-4-4-7. (Does stanza 4 make more sense now?)

Too much rigidity has no place in a limerick, and my "four-stanza limerick" bemoaned the formal ails of what I actually thought was a perfectly fine limerick. It was supposed to be a satirical look at self-aggrandizing poetry which is contrary to the spirit of limerick. I mean honestly, who writes a four-stanza limerick? (Side-note, aabba is specifically the Irish limerick. Other forms have rhyme schemes like abccb.)

In conclusion:
Bravo, Skirts, and my sincere apologies for any ruffled feathers across the board.